Summary 1: The Aqueduct (Student’s draft)

In his short story ” The Aqueduct “, Ray Bradbury (1979) revealed a great [can it be great???] idea that was, is and will be, [in my opinion, this is unnecessary for a summary] the cruelty and selfishness of humankind[good]. The people of the South used the blood of the people from the North part where there was an awful war between two countries. There was an aqueduct which connected the South  with the North  in such a way that the South people could use the water from the North [I would have placed this sentence first, and then the previous one]. It came the time to open this aqueduct and everybody liked to see that the liquid poured from it down the land. Nobody noticed that the liquid was actually the people’s blood from the North. They were happy and were thinking only that the water would never stop. They knew that The President was sending a representative to the North to assure that the two countries would keep on fighting.

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2 Responses to Summary 1: The Aqueduct (Student’s draft)

  1. vickycondrat says:

    Alina, there’s still a lot of work to do, but I’m positive you did your best. There’s no connection between the second and the third sentences. And there are things you should revise. It’s your first summary, you’ll succeed, I’m sure, better in the future 🙂

  2. Alina Gamureac says:

    Dear teacher,

    I know that there’s still a lot of work to do.Sincerely,I don’t like to do summaries.And also I didn’t like this text.But I will study,I will work hard and I will began to realize how a true summary looks like.Thank you!!!

    Love,
    Alina

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