My Experience as a Freshman (Student’s draft)

My first years like a freshman was very interesting and exciting.At the beginning at at my life like a student i was scared and i put a question what i’m doing here far away from my friends,from my perents? But at the end of the first semester i understund that the university is my jackpot for had a good life,for a career.In this years i made very much friends that are the girs from my group that i can say that they are very god person and at they are for my like a family. We love very much to spend the time after class discussing about differend things,to have walks in the park,to take pictures from differend important experience like Saint Valentine.many times we were in the theater and after we go somewhere and get fun together.At the end what i can say i would like to thank everyone forvtheir support and understanding.Thank everyone an good luck everyone for coming year.

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3 Responses to My Experience as a Freshman (Student’s draft)

  1. vickycondrat says:

    Dear Ann, it’s good that you try to do your best, but you should try harder 🙂 Remember I’ve given you some instructions on how to write this essay. I’m afraid you haven’t followed them. Yet, I’m proud of what you do and wish you to go on working even harder. I would advise you to revise this piece of writing and add some more information.

  2. Caisin Anna says:

    Dear Ann, I`m glad that you tried to write this essay. I understand that you wanted to say , but you have A LOT of mistakes, I`m sorry for it. I think that you`ve written your essay in a hurry. I think that you can correct the mistakes by yourself in the words: years,understund ,girs ,god ( you made us Gods 🙂 ),theater ,forvtheir. What about grammar, don`t forget that you began your sentence in past simple, so here “..what i’m doing ” you can`t use present continuous. And I did not understand this “and at they are for my like a family.”, maybe you should paraphrase it. At last, please, be careful at capital letters. Good luck!

  3. Bors Irina says:

    First of all i would like to say that the essay is not so bad, it has many mistakes and it hasn’t a structure,but I like your ideas. I think that you should correct this mistakes:
    1.”My first years like a freshman was very interesting”
    2. “At the beginning at at my life like a student”
    3.”i put a question what i’m doing here far away from my friends,from my perents?”
    4.”i understund”
    5. “university is my jackpot for had a good life”
    6.” much friends”
    7.” they are very god person and at they are for my like a family.”
    8.” in the theater”
    And you are eating many letters, 😀 please correct your mistakes . You did a great job. Good luck.

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